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A compliment lies
On the tip of his tongue
But he's too afraid.
Time freezes as he
Clamps his mouth shut
So as not to let it fall.

You do have beautiful eyes

He looks down
Avoids her eyes.
Hours seem to pass
Before anyone speaks.

The compliment still lies
On the tip of his tongue,
But he's too afraid
Of the consequences
Of letting it slip.
Too late to say it now.
The moment is gone.

She tells him she loves him,
That he's a diamond in the rough,
She doesn't seem to realise
That to him that's not enough.

The picture is there.
Join the dots.
Make it fit.

Can't make it fit.

There will always be that something
Where the last line should be.
Something that stands between them.
Warning him against allowing
The compliment to fall from his lips.
©2007-2009 ~sce-violinist
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This is kind of random, but that's what I do in study period it seems....

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:iconproudcherazbiqueen:
XD Yay I love this poem!

The boy and girl sound so sweet. <3

:+fav:

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If you're one of those wacky things called a procrastionator, post this in your sig.

WAIT. Don't post it. You would be doing it immediately, wouldn't you, and that's not characteristic of a procrastinator. Oh dear!

I guess you'll have to wait awhile
:iconsce-violinist:
Thanks :)

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~You are your best thing
:iconabrainthatleaks:
Wonderful! I know this feeling and you did a great job capturing it. :D
:icontendon98:
I really like this one...

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"So it's like a choice of constantly orgasming, or constantly feeling as if you're being repeatedly kicked in the balls."-Simon
:iconsce-violinist:
Thanks so much! And for the favourite!:glomp: It really means a lot.
It's kind of random and... kind of disjointed. Just a bunch of thoughts really.

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~You are your best thing
:iconsce-violinist:
Thanks so much!
I know the feeling to. I just swapped the he and she, really. for the sake of it not being assumed to be personal

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~You are your best thing
:iconcanticum:
Hmm, quite interesting.. I really like it.
the last stanza in particular just sort of makes everything fit, although I'm not sure if that's the right way to put it ^^; anyway, nice poem :)
:iconsce-violinist:
Thanks. It's sort of scattered and random. but that's what those situations are like

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~You are your best thing
:iconcanticum:
:) yep, you got it perfectly!

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